In the post "See the hit, save the brain gameplan at cautious UC" Krista talks about the concussion rates taken throughout the past couple of years. It also talks about the 'gameplan' in UC that dramatically dropped concussion rates by training players to see their 'blindside'.
(Best Written Line)
" As they smack flashing buttons, the Bearcats are improving eye-hand coordination, timing, anticipation, depth perception and peripheral vision. It's fun. It's also potentially brain-saving."
I think that this is the best written line because of the diction and syntax that is used. The diction that is used includes a variety of informal and elevated words. When she explains how the Bearcats are improving by saying "...improving eye-hand coordination, timing, anticipation, depth perception and peripheral vision." you get a much more sophisticated, knowledgeable vibe compared to "It's fun. It's also potentially brain-saving." This line shows the readers that the article is quite casual by getting a clear point across using informal diction.
Syntax used in this sentence also varies. Krista first uses a long and involved sentence separated by many commas. The next sentence is very short, only two words; "It's fun." This defiantly changes the tone/ mood of the paragraph.
I believe that Ramsey's writing style is informative but comical/ laid-back at the same time.
Examples:
- "But before parents claw back the iPhones, experts say the problem may not lie in the technology itself, but the amount of time spent on it, the environment in which it's used and the activities it's replacing." (For better vision, kids need time outdoors)
- "Manning is a Southern-bred gentleman whose classic suits match up nicely with his classy manners." (Super Bowl QBs score points for great style)
- " As they smack flashing buttons, the Bearcats are improving eye-hand coordination, timing, anticipation, depth perception and peripheral vision. It's fun. It's also potentially brain-saving." (See the hit, save the brain gameplan at cautious UC)
Questions:
1.) Have you always loved writing and suspected it to be a future job or hobby throughout middle/high school?
2.) What did you major in college and what was your first job coming out of college?
3.) Where does your 'voice/style' of writing come from? Was it influenced by any family members growing up?
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